Editing for Conciseness

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An authentic networking conversation happens when you have a shared common interest and are sharing back and forth on a topic of mutual interest where mutual learning happens.

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An authentic networking conversation happens when individuals are sharing and learning about a topic of mutual interest.

Editing for Correct Grammar

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Researchers expect that the side affects of the new drug will be minimal.

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Researchers expect that the side effects of the new drug will be minimal.

Editing for Improved Word Choice

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The scientific method is a fairly rigid way of thinking allowing scientists to systematically approach a problem or observation.

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The scientific method relies on a rigorous way of thinking that enables scientists to systematically approach a problem or observation.

Editing for Coherence

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This has led to the need to define EFT as validated the dozens clinical trials that have shown EFT to be efficacious for phobias, PTSD, anxiety, depression, and pain when applied with fidelity to The EFT Manual.

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The effectiveness of EFT in treating phobias, PTSD, anxiety, depression, and pain has been proven in dozens of clinical trials. The efficaciousness of EFT depends on fidelity to the techniques and processes outlined in the EFT Manual.

Editing for Consistency

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Jazz Masters will host a table of eight and provide tablecloths and flowers. The Jazz Table Masters will arrive 30 minutes early to set up tables.

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Jazz Masters will host a table of eight and provide tablecloths and flowers. The Jazz Masters also are expected to arrive 30 minutes early to set up tables.